New before/after: "The Poppet and the Lune"

Today's before/after is Madeline Ciricillo's "The Poppet and the Lune." Madeline won a contest to have her blurb reworked and says "I love it!!" about the new blurb.

Before:
The witch who made the patchwork girl died before she could give her creation a name. Stitched together from the remains of the villagers’ dead children—whose memories still live in her flesh—and held together by a ring made of moonbeams, the patchwork girl is a spell as yet unfinished. She can never be what her parents wanted her to be: a replacement for the children they’ve lost. So when the poppet grows up, and grows tired of being a disappointment, she decides to embark upon a journey through the Everwood Forest in search of her real name.

In the forest she meets Faolin, a newly made wereman (a man trapped as a wolf except during the full moon) running from the beasts who killed his father, and stole his throne as Wolf King. He joins the patchwork girl on her journey, and she promises to help him become human again and return to his fiancée. Together, they face the dangers of the forest as their paths wind together: Faolin running from his destiny, the patchwork girl in search of her own, and both of them bound by moonlight.

But Faolin, afraid of the beast he has become, has known all along what he must do in order to lift the curse and return to his fiancée. In fact, it is the very reason he sought out the patchwork girl to begin with—and now the only reason he is willing to leave her side: to save her from himself.

After:
The patchwork girl is incomplete, and a disappointment. The witch who made her died before giving her a name. The families who commissioned her reject her; the girl is no replacement for the dead children whose bodies make up her patches. Worse, the children's memories haunt her.

Faolin is a newly made wereman. He lives as a wolf but for the three days the moon is full, when he becomes a man again. Faolin is on the run from the beasts who killed his father the Wolf King and stole his throne.

More than anything the patchwork girl wants to find her real name, and a place in the world where she can be accepted for what she is--whatever that might be. More than anything Faolin wants to become fully human again and return to his fiancée.

When the two meet in the Everwood Forest, they decide to work together before time runs out for both of them. If the patchwork girl doesn't find her real name, the memories haunting her flesh may take over completely--but what she doesn't know is that breaking the wereman's curse may also end her life.
 
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