Thursday, December 8, 2011

New before/after: "Thin Hope"


Today's before/after is Naomi and Holly Hook's "Thin Hope."

Before:
Princess Kiki Endicott has enough of her own problems without war looming over the horizon.  Her uncle, the Royal General, won't stop stalking her, despite the fact that she's already engaged to her hot fiancĂ©, Damon.  But it turns out that her uncle's obsession with her goes farther: he wants her to join him in becoming the most powerful beings in the world, using the blood of several races, and he'll stop at nothing to meet his goal.

Soon her uncle manipulates two races to invade her city, Frelladon: the Delainians, genetically engineered by their leader to control the weather, and the Latienians, magic users ruled by a power-hungry Emperor.  Neither are as dangerous as the Royal General, who is turning into a creature that will take far more than Kiki and Damon's military skills to defeat.
 

After:
Princess Kiki Endicott faces two threats from one man. Royal General Patrick Maxwell says he's only pursuing peace, but his plan depends entirely on making himself the genetically enhanced, superhuman ruler of the known world. He wants Kiki to join him in near-immortality and become his wife--even though he's her uncle. In his desire for her, Maxwell tries to kill her lover Damon Stanza. Maxwell ends up in prison instead, and Damon takes his place as Royal General.

Now Maxwell has escaped and is marching on Kiki's city with a horde of genetically altered soldiers and magic users. It's going to take everything Kiki and Damon have to defeat Maxwell before he takes the kingdom--and Kiki herself.


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